Story: The conflict was between the jock being cool and helped the poor little nerd that fell. The shots that contributed to the rising action are... 1. The long shot of the two girls walking down the path. 2. The shot of the jock saying, "Now that's what i'm talking about." 3. The shot when the nerd runs up with the umberella. 4. The shot when the nerd falls and starts to cry. Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. You could show that the nerd has a crush on the jock. 2. You could also instead of the nerd tripping by herself maybe have the "mean girls" trip her. The climax occurred when the jock helps the nerd up. During the resolution the jock starts to run with the nerd. You could add to the resolution by having the jock and the nerd hug after he helps her up, and link arms while they're running. This would help give us the idea that The jock is actually very considerate and helping. Camera shots: We expecially like the long shot of the "mean girls," because it helped emphasize the idea that they were going to be somewhat important in the video. We think that you might add a shot right after every cut because it feels like we're going in a circl at times. The new shots would be consistent. This would help the flow. Edits: On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 5. One edit we would change was between the nerd running up the first and the nerd running up the second time. We aren't sure how the in point/out point are supposed to be set because it makes no sense. Use of music and sound effects: There is no music. Titles and credits: The title of the film reflected its contents well. It did grab our attention. We don't have any suggestions for the a new title. The titles were consistent and they were effective. Overall; Overall, we thought your film had a good idea/story line but the cuts need to be done better. What we liked best was the acting and the jock helping the nerd. Our strongest suggestion is that you fix all your cuts. (no offense)
Shots, dialogue, actions: 1 The shot of the PE students walking out on the field--adds realness to everything 2 The wide shot of the nerd. It showed her emotions more clearly. 3 The shot of the jock and the nerd running off together. It showed the ending clearly.
To add to the rising actions I could show the nerd having a crush on the jock MORE so. It seems like she does but we can't be sure, she might just be really friendly.
The climaz occurred when the jock helps the nerd off the ground.
To add to the resolution I'm not to sure.
The shot of the means girls to the jocks was a striahgt cut. Just the acting added so much to it. It was some what commical BUT it worked.
There was no music to comment on.
6 no the editing. I think it could be cleaner and plus there was no music.
The titles and credits to me somewhat fit but they aren't a PERFECT fit to the film.
Overall the film was pretty good. Just need to find music that you can use for it.
4 comments:
Feedback given by Hayley Barker and Kayla Dawe
Story:
The conflict was between the jock being cool and helped the poor little nerd that fell.
The shots that contributed to the rising action are...
1. The long shot of the two girls walking down the path.
2. The shot of the jock saying, "Now that's what i'm talking about."
3. The shot when the nerd runs up with the umberella.
4. The shot when the nerd falls and starts to cry.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. You could show that the nerd has a crush on the jock.
2. You could also instead of the nerd tripping by herself maybe have the "mean girls" trip her.
The climax occurred when the jock helps the nerd up.
During the resolution the jock starts to run with the nerd.
You could add to the resolution by having the jock and the nerd hug after he helps her up, and link arms while they're running. This would help give us the idea that The jock is actually very considerate and helping.
Camera shots:
We expecially like the long shot of the "mean girls," because it helped emphasize the idea that they were going to be somewhat important in the video.
We think that you might add a shot right after every cut because it feels like we're going in a circl at times. The new shots would be consistent. This would help the flow.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 5. One edit we would change was between the nerd running up the first and the nerd running up the second time. We aren't sure how the in point/out point are supposed to be set because it makes no sense.
Use of music and sound effects:
There is no music.
Titles and credits:
The title of the film reflected its contents well. It did grab our attention. We don't have any suggestions for the a new title.
The titles were consistent and they were effective.
Overall;
Overall, we thought your film had a good idea/story line but the cuts need to be done better. What we liked best was the acting and the jock helping the nerd. Our strongest suggestion is that you fix all your cuts. (no offense)
The conflict is between the jock and himself.
Shots, dialogue, actions:
1 The shot of the PE students walking out on the field--adds realness to everything
2 The wide shot of the nerd. It showed her emotions more clearly.
3 The shot of the jock and the nerd running off together. It showed the ending clearly.
To add to the rising actions I could show the nerd having a crush on the jock MORE so. It seems like she does but we can't be sure, she might just be really friendly.
The climaz occurred when the jock helps the nerd off the ground.
To add to the resolution I'm not to sure.
The shot of the means girls to the jocks was a striahgt cut. Just the acting added so much to it. It was some what commical BUT it worked.
There was no music to comment on.
6 no the editing. I think it could be cleaner and plus there was no music.
The titles and credits to me somewhat fit but they aren't a PERFECT fit to the film.
Overall the film was pretty good. Just need to find music that you can use for it.
Dear Cody,
We simply meant to clean up the cuts... but we think that you and your group are fantastic. Forgiven? :)
Love
Hayley and Kayla
Thank you, we deeply appreciate your kindess.
Love,
Group Five, Block One
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